ANOTHER MISSED OPPORTUNITY
In today's Telegraph business section, the centerpiece profile features Troy Tarpley, owner of a business that repairs dents in automobiles. By any measure, Troy is a decent, honorable man, and I really wanted to help my friend's business by putting a little pizzazz into the profile when I edited it last week. You know, give it a little "attitude."
The first thing I thought of doing was changing the attributions from "said" to more colorful verbs, such as "smirked," "leered" or "preened." But what I really should have done was insert a quote like this: "Yeah, I do a lot of business at people's homes," Tarpley smirked. "My favorite call are when I go to a house that has a hot, young wife and an absent husband. Then I do a different sort of body work, if you know what I mean."
I don't see how business couldn't help but improve with that kind of PR.
In today's Telegraph business section, the centerpiece profile features Troy Tarpley, owner of a business that repairs dents in automobiles. By any measure, Troy is a decent, honorable man, and I really wanted to help my friend's business by putting a little pizzazz into the profile when I edited it last week. You know, give it a little "attitude."
The first thing I thought of doing was changing the attributions from "said" to more colorful verbs, such as "smirked," "leered" or "preened." But what I really should have done was insert a quote like this: "Yeah, I do a lot of business at people's homes," Tarpley smirked. "My favorite call are when I go to a house that has a hot, young wife and an absent husband. Then I do a different sort of body work, if you know what I mean."
I don't see how business couldn't help but improve with that kind of PR.
posted by John Parnell at 11:00 AM
1 Comments:
John, your not right. Your funny, but not right.
BTW, I wouldn't mind the increase in business, so if you come up with some other ideas, let me know. I'll run them past the Board over beers at IVP.
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